I'm not sure what exactly you were trying to portrait here, but I see an amazing concept in this photo. The darkness all around the small strip of light over the eyes adds so much more focus to the eyes and provokes a certain sense of nostalgia within my own being. Memories come back looking at this which in my opinion makes it critical is being a good artist and you have done just that with this photo. Also, the look on the model's face portraits certain emotions that simply amplifies the beauty, the concept and the greatness in this photo. Well done!
I think =MrsGein 's critique is quite accurate , but i'd like to add that her amulet requires too much attention i would pohotoshop it out as it redirects attention from what's emotional to ...2 stripes of white.